2016年浙江新高考作文解析

1、衢州三中 邱賽仙(Sarah),讓語言插上思維的翅膀,——語法填空和應(yīng)用文寫作教學(xué)探究,2016年10月高考平均分,I looked ____59____(quick) at the clock. The show starts in one hour, plenty of time! I drank the rest of my coffee and went to take a shower. Soon after, I was

2、 on my way to the show, _60_____________(carry) a fancy black handbag and a happy smile.The hall was dark when I came in; the show was about _61________(begin). I made my way backstage just ____62____ the great magician

3、 was putting on his top hat.“Daddy, I’m so glad to see you,” I _63_____________(whisper). “I’m in town for the writer’s class, but I just couldn’t miss your show.” I gave him a quick hug and went back into the seating a

4、rea, leaving him with a __64_________(surprise) smile. I settled down in the darkness, and the curtains opened.Magically, that show remains the Great Jason’s best __65______________(perform) to this day.,carrying,to beg

5、in,whispered,surprised,performance,4,語法填空,考查內(nèi)容,語法知識,詞形變化,邏輯推理,語篇理解,more than grammar,,設(shè)計意圖,學(xué)習(xí)潛能,核心素養(yǎng)：語言能力、思維品質(zhì) 文化意識、學(xué)習(xí)能力,轉(zhuǎn)變觀念,,,5,語境中領(lǐng)會語法，提高語言運用能力,教學(xué)探究——語境中生成語言知識 語篇中提升思維能力,語境中理解詞匯，提升推理能力,解讀段落結(jié)構(gòu)，培養(yǎng)邏輯

6、思維,分析句子結(jié)構(gòu)，養(yǎng)成思維慣性,01,03,04,02,6,(1) 語境中領(lǐng)會語法, 提高語言運用能力,6,,How has this come about?,What kind of human activity has led to the consequence？,could be as high ascould be as low as,It could be very --- It would lead to -The

7、re may be --,will bewill makewill producewill encourageall of which will -,M6U4 Global Warming,trend,what has happened to the earth's temperature?,who has explored the problem?,7,This being my first experience, I

8、 stayed at the top and watched them.,______of his friends was on the phone calling 911, some of them _________(try)CPR.,Having collected and evaluated the information, I -----Having worked hard all day, I went to bed ea

9、rly.Having experienced quite a few earthquakes in Hawaii already, I ---Having earlier collected special clothes from the observatory, we---Having studied volcanoes now for many years, I ---,M6 U5 An Exciting Job,,8,（2

10、） 語境中理解詞匯，提升推理能力,His first task was to write his story, but he had to do it carefully. Although he realized the man had been lying, Zhou Yang knew he must not accuse him directly. He would have to be ________. ________ t

11、oo! He knew how to do that. Months of training had taught him to write with no wasted words or phrases. He sat down at his computer and began to work.,M5 u4 Using language : Getting The Scoop,accurate,Concise,,,,,,9,MY F

12、IRST WORK ASSIGNMENT Never will Zhou Yang (ZY) forget his first assignment at the office of a popular English newspaper. His discussion with his new boss, Hu Xin (HX), was to strongly influence his life as a jour

13、nalist.HX: Welcome. We’re delighted you’re coming to work with us. Your first job here will be an assistant journalist.ZY: Can I go out on a story immediately?HX: (laughing) That’s admirable, but I’m afraid i

14、t would be unusual! Wait till you’re more experienced. First we’ll put you as an assistant to an experienced journalist. Later you can cover a story and submit the article yourself.ZY: Wonderful. What do I need t

15、o take with me? I already have a HX: No need for a camera. You’ll have a professional photographer with you to take photographs.,M5U4 Reading,10,My first work assignment was unforgettable.I was _______(delight ) to see

16、My new boss ， Hu Xin (HX),who was to _______(strong) influence my life as a journalist.I asked him if I could go on a story __________(immediate).He said that although it was ________(admire), it would be _____(usual).

17、He would first put me as an assistant to an ________(experience)journalist until I was more experienced. There would be a __________(profession) photographer to take photographs with me. He told me what I needed was to b

18、e _______(curiosity) and to listen for _______(detail) facts and prepared the next questions ________(depend)on what the person said. （改編教材--詞性轉(zhuǎn)化）,delighted,strongly,immediately,admirable,unusual,experienced,profession

19、al,curious,detailed,depending,,11,(3). 解讀段落結(jié)構(gòu)，培養(yǎng)邏輯思維,過渡詞和連接詞往往是作者表達觀點的信號詞。 However , there was one band that started in a different way. It was called the Monkees and began as a TV show. As some of these

20、actors could not sing well enough, they had to rely on other musicians to help them. ----, the Monkees would play and sing songs written by other musicians. However, after a year or so in which they became more se

21、rious about their work, the Monkees started to play and sing their own songs like a real band. (段落間邏輯關(guān)系),M2U5 A Band That Wasn't,,,,12,When I finished the four years in prison, I went to find a job. Since I

22、was better educated, I got a job working in an office. However, the police found out and told my boss that I had been in prison for blowing up government buildings. So I lost my job. I did not work again for twenty years

23、 until Mr Mandela and the ANC came to power in 1994. All that time my wife and children had to beg for food and help from relatives or friends. Luckily Mr Mandela remembered me and gave me a job taking tourists around my

24、 old prison on Robben Island. 段落內(nèi)邏輯關(guān)系,M1U5 THE REST OF ELIAS’ STORY,,,,,13,You may find it _________ (astonish) that Charlie ________(teach) to sing as soon as he could speak . Such training was common in _____(act)

25、families at this times , ______(especial) when the family income was often_______(certain). ____________(fortunate) his father died, _______(leave) the family even _________(更窮的) . By his teens, Charlie ____________(beco

26、me) one of the most popular child actors in the England. He could mime and act the fool doing ordinary everyday tasks. No one was ever bored _______watch) him –his subtle acting made everything entertaining. (否定句,被動語態(tài)和

27、比較級No.2，5 ,6，8學(xué)生的思維盲點 ),astonishing,was taught,acting,especially,uncertain,Unfortuanately,leaving,worse off,had become,watching,M4U3 A MASTER OF NONVERBAL HUMOUR,,14,,(4). 分析句子結(jié)構(gòu)，養(yǎng)成思維慣性,教學(xué)文本的價值有：英語文字的載體（語言的）信息傳播的載體（內(nèi)容

28、的）文本理解的載體（策略的）情感交流的載體（社會的）智能發(fā)展的載體（思維的）----(葛炳芳，2015) 《英語閱讀教學(xué)的綜合視野：理論與實踐》,解讀句子的能力是理解文本的基礎(chǔ),15,Heroic Teenager Receives Award Seventeen-year-old teenager, ________________,_____________ the lifesaver Awards ______

29、___in Rivertown ______giving lifesaving first aid on his neighbour after a shocking knife attack.,M5u5 HEROIC TEENAGER RECEIVES AWARD,John Janson,was honored at,last night,for,16,The King of Prussia,could never have imag

30、ined that the Amber Room, ________(decorate) with gold and jewels, ________(design) in ______fancy style popular in those days, ___________(have) such an amazing story.,改編教材,decorated,designed,the,would have,Book2 unit

31、 1 IN SEARCH OF THE AMBER ROOM,17,The adobe dwellings (土坯房）__41__ (build) by the Pueblo Indians of the American Southwest are admired by even __42__ most modern of architects and engineers. （2015全國卷二）,built,A study of

32、travelers_____68_____(conduct) by the website TripAdvisor names Yangshuo as one of the top 10 destinations in the world. 2015全國卷一）,conducted,18,I was on my way to the show, _60_____________(carry) a fancy black handbag a

33、nd a happy smile. (2016.10浙江),carrying,19,語法填空,,20,英語高考書面表達反思 （浙江大學(xué)城市學(xué)院 王之江教授）,Writing is the king of the other three basic language skills in terms of linguistic

34、preciseness and communicative appropriateness.,寫作,二、寫作,21,1.曾經(jīng)的上下求索,二、應(yīng)用文寫作——文本啟思 思而行文,22,根據(jù)Krashen的可理解性輸入理論，閱讀是寫作最有力的支撐點 (轉(zhuǎn)引自沈霞，2007),葉圣陶談漢語閱讀課堂教學(xué)的功能: 閱讀提供了寫作的范本。

35、 （轉(zhuǎn)引自葛炳芳，2015）,《閱讀教學(xué)中目標(biāo)定位和活動設(shè)計有效性的課例研究》： （邱賽仙，2016）,閱讀中思考，在思考中寫作,23,,,2016年10月高考應(yīng)用文寫作真題第一節(jié) 應(yīng)用文寫作（滿分15分） 假定你是李華。下學(xué)期你將作為交換生(exchange student) 去加拿大一所高中學(xué)

36、習(xí)，住在Lynn家里。請給Lynn寫一封郵件，內(nèi)容包括： 1. 介紹自己； 2. 告知到達時間； 3. 詢問應(yīng)做何準備。注意： 1. 詞數(shù)80左右； 2. 可適當(dāng)增加細節(jié)，以使行文連貫。,One possible versionDear Lynn, I’m Li Hua, an exchange student from China. I’m happy to know that I’

37、ll be staying with your family in the next few months while I’m studying at the local high school. Thank you for having me! I will arrive in Toronto on August 20th and get to your place late that afternoon. I wonder if y

38、ou could give me some advice so that I can get myself better prepared for my stay in Canada. Looking forward to seeing you! Best wishes, Li Hua,My name is Li Hua , I 'll be an exchange sudent to a high sc

39、hool in California for study. And I 'll live in your home. I'll go there in October next year. But I don't know what can I bring. How can I get to your home? How are the people there? What are they like doing

40、? I 'll hope your letter? Thank you very much.,27,應(yīng)用文寫作——文本啟思 思而行文,Whom to write to:,28,01,換位思考，與目標(biāo)讀者產(chǎn)生共鳴,What to write for：,What to write ：,How to write :,明確作文目的，避免文章偏離主題,培養(yǎng)發(fā)散性思維 豐富學(xué)生的寫作內(nèi)容,(1).梳理文章脈絡(luò)，用整體思維謀篇布局,(

41、2).分析邏輯關(guān)系，以縝密思維表達觀點,(3).積累話題語料，提高學(xué)生思維敏捷性,(4).賞析修辭手法，讓學(xué)生的作文更精彩,02,03,04,29,Module6 Unit3 Reading : Advice from Grandad. （勸誡信）,1.Whom to write to: 換位思考 與目標(biāo)讀者產(chǎn)生共鳴 換位思考又叫同理心。就是站在他人的立場思考和處理問題。這是應(yīng)用文寫作的針對性特點。,How does G

42、randad make his advice acceptable? Please give your supporting evidence.,30,my dear grandson. ---- Believe me, I know how easy it is to begin smoking and how tough it is to stop. You see, during adolescence I also smoked

43、 and became addicted to cigarettes.,to express his love for his grandsonto show his understandingto share his own experience,to shorten the distanceto make it believable,,,假設(shè)你是某雜志社的編輯Joy, 你收到了一個中學(xué)生的來信，請你根據(jù)他的情況給他回一封信，提

44、出你的建議。Dear Editor, I smoked a cigarette for the first time last night. I am so disappointed in myself. I need to know whether I should tell my mom about it. And I am afraid that I will be addicted to cigarettes, whic

45、h are harmful to my health. What should I do ? I really need your help.,31,,32,,33,33,34,,,35,1. It would be handy to have lifts to all parts of the cinema.2. It would help to fit sets of earphones to all seats, not ju

46、st to some of them.3. I’d like to suggest that the seats at the back be placed higher than those at the front so that everyone can see the screen easily.4. Thank you for reading my letter. I hope my suggestions will me

47、et with your approval.,,37,What to write for 明確作文目的，避免文章偏離主題,Your mother tell me that you started smoking some time ago and now you are finding it difficult to give it up,38,Dear Tom, Here are some tips which are

48、from bottom of my heart. To begin with, your mom will not be angry with you. After all, she is your mom . Perhaps she can give you some advice and set rules about .(還沒有亮明觀點，只是句型的堆積)Next, prepare yourself and decide o

49、n a day to quit. Don't give up easily, try over and over. What 's more, instead of smoking, do something else which you like doing. Last but not least, be determined, never say never.（全部是吸煙上癮的人怎么戒煙的建議。）,2014安徽高考卷

50、：,為了幫助中學(xué)生健康成長，某中學(xué)英文報開辟了“HEART-TO-HEART”專欄。假設(shè)你是該欄目的編輯Jamie，收到一封署名為Worried的求助信。信中該同學(xué)向你訴說了自己的困擾：近日容易發(fā)脾氣，使正常的學(xué)習(xí)和生活受到了影響。請用英文給該同學(xué)寫一封回信。內(nèi)容要點如下：1表示理解并給予安慰; 2提出建議并說明理由。 “如何正確發(fā)泄情緒”和“如何不影響別人”,39,40,Hi Worried: I’m sorry

51、 to know that you’re having such a bad time at the moment. The truth is everyone will have one of those periods when things seem to be wrong, so you don’t have to worry so much. The important thing is to learn to control

52、 your temper so that you may not do or say anything you’ll regret. Here are three useful tips: First, talk to someone you trust about how you feel. This is a good way of letting your anger out without hurting others

53、or yourself. Second, go outdoors and play team games with your friends，as physical exercise is an effective way to get rid of anger .And third, remain optimistic about your future. Such a positive attitude towards life

54、can be helpful in lifting your spirits. I hope you’ll soon feel calmer and carry on as normal.Yours，Jamie,,41,What to write (1)培養(yǎng)發(fā)散性思維 豐富學(xué)生的寫作內(nèi)容 應(yīng)用文寫作的情景內(nèi)容都是有限定的，對于學(xué)生的思維能力要求比較高的是怎樣提出合理有效的解決問題的方法。 通過對學(xué)生的發(fā)散

55、性思維訓(xùn)練，使學(xué)生寫作思路開闊，內(nèi)容豐富。,What advice would you offer to James?,42,Read the second part of the text to get suggestions to quit smoking,P_______ yourself.Be d__________.Break the h_____.R_____.Get h____ if you need.K____

56、 trying.,,,,,,,repare,etermined,abit,elax,elp,eep,,44,How to write it (1)梳理文章脈絡(luò) 用整體思維謀篇布局 教師應(yīng)該從文本的核心主線確定教學(xué)的核心任務(wù)，并圍繞這個核心任務(wù)設(shè)計教學(xué)過程。 （葛炳芳，2015）,happy,the problem of your smoking,How to become addicted,why t

57、o quit smoking,How to quit smoking,worried,regretful,pain,hope,Advice From Grandad,Healthy life,Book6 unit 3 Healthy Life,,,勸誡主線,情緒暗線,學(xué)生習(xí)作　假定你是李華。在校報英語專欄看到了學(xué)?！坝⒄Z文化節(jié)”的一則招募啟事，請閱讀啟事，并根據(jù)寫作要點和寫作要求寫一封應(yīng)征郵件?！　olunteers Wanted

58、　　Our annual English Festival, which will be held on June 15-17, 2015, is now looking for 20 student volunteers to provide service for Talent Show, Speech Contest, and English Debate. If you are interested, please send

59、an application email at your earliest convenience to Ms.Chen at chenlaoshi@aef.com.　　寫作要點：　　 1.表示寫信意圖；　　 2.陳述應(yīng)征目的；　　3.說明應(yīng)征條件（性格、能力等）。,46,47,48,49,(2). 分析邏輯關(guān)系 以縝密思維表達觀點,理性思維重點是尊重事實和證據(jù)，有實證意識和嚴謹?shù)那笾獞B(tài)度。（中國學(xué)生發(fā)展

60、核心素養(yǎng)征求意見稿） 學(xué)生需要掌握“如何讓自己的觀點站得住腳”的論證思維能力。 （葛炳芳，2015） By the way, did you know that this is because you become addicted in three different ways? Firstly,secondly, lastly… in a logical way When I was youn

61、g, I didn’t know much about the harmful effects of smoking. I didn’t know, for example, that ---However, what I did know was that my girlfriend,50,Writing makes an exact man.,M1U1 Friendship : A. Write a letter to

62、your best friend asking some advice on how to make friends in the new school. B. write a letter to offer some tips to Xiao Dong on how to change the situation .,Dear xiao Dong,(P7) I'm sorry you are having tr

63、oule in making friends .----Here are some tips to help you . First , Why not---- if you do this, Secondly, you should /can---- Then/That way,---- Thirdly, it would be a good idea if ---- By doing this

64、,,,M2U2,,,,,,M2U3,,,M2U4,,,,,55,(3). 積累話題語料 提高學(xué)生的思維敏捷性 語料庫具有穩(wěn)定、規(guī)范、板塊化等特征,學(xué)生寫作時可以直接提取.能夠有效提高學(xué)生寫作的思維敏捷性。《考試說明》關(guān)于應(yīng)用文寫作的第二條要求：使用與主題相關(guān)的詞匯。,P4 harmful effects: do terrible damage to , it is more difficult for ,

65、 Be abnormal, affect the health, smell terrible, turn yellow, become breathless, be taken off the school football team, unfit.,Book6 unit 3 Advice From Gra

66、ndad,56,,57,widestmostly usedmost used,,（高二學(xué)生）,（高一學(xué)生）,poster,M1U2 The Road To Modern English,M6U4 Global Warming,M7U2 Robots,(4) . 賞析修辭手法 讓學(xué)生的作文更精彩 修辭潤色關(guān)注作者用詞的恰當(dāng)性、精確性、簡潔性和多樣性;恰當(dāng)使用修辭能夠有效提高交際效果。

67、（賴朝輝等：25）,61,精確性和簡潔性是應(yīng)用文的語言特色。,62,It is not easy to stop smoking, but millions have managed to quit and so can you. Here are a few suggestions.● Prepare yourself. ● Be determined. ● Break the habit.● Relax. ● Get he

68、lp if you need. ● Keep trying.,M6U3 Advice From Grandad,63,M5U3 Using Language：I HAVE SEEN AMAZING THINGS,Described as an enormous round plate, it spins slowly in space to imitate the pull of the earth’s gravity. In